Originally inspired by the poem Monster
Feathers and claws scrabble in the dark.
The sun is a warm distraction
but I am blind to my heaven
and words hit a dark wall,
erected by the king.
I close my eyes
And the words spring…
my soul drags itself from beneath the pot of gold
to weave an exit.
It is a dream and here, my diamond thought hangs
my button, pushed tenderly, brings breath…
my skin stretches
my ladder unravels
find your own way pilgrim…my hand has turned,
to earth
now
sparks and flashes force a rain of little pebbles
like droplets on the ocean…
if only the whale hears my prayer, do I still exist?
my words have hit the king
who pockets them and prepares their return.
I cry in the night
my fingers reach for the sky and moonlight
sitting on tips like points of knife
sharp and beautiful
Am I a wasted thing,
what can quench my thirst for all I need?
I want more
my tongue melts
into light on dark pavement
surrounded by opinions
accosted by adult mouths
baby noise
My shell is tough but not indomitable
I am one of 7 billion answers
My conviction cripples me
In my defeat I find my wings
I
an opulent monster,
misunderstood,
in my red riding hood…
I give in to the dichotomy and
shrug
like silk it slides and gathers
a bloody mess
a puddle
of love
This is superb.
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thankyou, what a wonderful compliment! xx
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Oh I get what you were doing now.. I thought you were going to keep the original words in while putting yours in… nicely done…
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thankyou x
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How incredibly beautiful and stirring this is. I love this do much. 😀
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it stirs me too…i think i have to read it again to find the secret…there is something in it that i haven’t taken the time to absorb myself !
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Like this one very much, … soul searching, love seems seperate like the grains of sand upon a beach..yet together we are whole.
God’s light is your other wing…so you can then fly. Very thought provoking! 🙂 TWEETED!
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THANKS and that is it you’ve hit it…i guess it is in the title but what you say is true…we have a choice, thats the beauty and ultimately we will choose the light but until then we get freedom of experience (if you can call it freedom)
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Wow…leaves me absolutely speechless. I can “feel” through your writing. Just..beautiful.
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thanks darling! i appreciate your response…anothers emotion…. a writers greatest boon
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The rhythm in this is lovely…:)
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thankyou xx
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I read the poem “Monster” before reading this and I have to say even though there’s also loneliness in this poem, nature seems to provide a way out. I love so many of these lines, but the one that struck the most is “I am one of the 7 billion answers”, we always forget that we are just one of these people searching, crying, hoping and even though it doesn’t get any easier, it is “In my defeat that I find my wings”. Thanks for this!
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Thank YOU for taking the time to read, and absorb it.You are exactly right, I believe that there is a way through loneliness and it is in the remembering that we are no bigger smaller better or worse than any other but a simple piece of the puzzle…..
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“In my defeat I find my wings”
beautiful.. i like this piece a lot a lot of the imagery is nice
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cool, its valuable for me as a poetry writer to hear what others think…and which images stand out to them x
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i understand =)
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beautifully written. heart goes out for the person who utters this poem.
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yes a very deep and scary exploration into the darker aspects of self-discovery!
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