a response to Rainer Maria Rilke’s Duino Elegies below is the first of ten poems.
There is tugging at my ribbons
a wild, teasing acapella
oh this noise is rich…
rich enough to decorate my hollows
to drop me to my knees
whilst midnight space rushes
like swift tide
expanding the universe
cracking my chest
a kaleidoscopic orchestra of YES
Yet the whisper is gold that God’s music is a floating note
and it is just I, this phosphorescent speck who has been dappled with fluted purple explosion…
I have been crowned with questions
and led to these stone steps
to press my burning ear against a mossy wall….
eternity compressed
listening for angels
braving the storm
Silver Poetry 
Excellent. You just gotta know that me and others are gonna love that purple explosion line. Have you ever seen Terrence Malick’s “The Tree of Life”? Your poem reminds me of that epic bit.
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is that the one with Brad Pitt? purple explosions just seem the most powerful kind to me… i want to add them to every poem lately :-))
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Yup. He does really well in it but it’s the visual beauty that steals the day.
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yes . agreed
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One of my faves from Ms. SilverPotery. Thank you dear sweet poetess.
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thanks sweet man x
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Beautiful and evocative – thank you for sharing. Be well~
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you too, may you be blessed with wellness 🙂
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Nice 🙂
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thankYOU xx
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This is so beautiful. It’s lyrical and gorgeous and so very perfect.
My favorite: “a kaleidoscopic orchestra of YES”
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Thanks 🙂 I liked that line so much I am SURE I’ve used in another poem!
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Absolutely breathtaking the poem and the art….you are amazing!
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S M I L E xxxxx (I am a silver mirror)
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To call this poetic piece an unfathomably brilliant blend of artistic writing and beautiful imagery would be a serious understatement. Thoroughly enjoyed this poem!
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oh my goodness I am absorbing your comment like it is ambrosia
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lovely! is this your painting, also?
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thanks, yep its one of my little watercolour and ink pieces, just a doodle really
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ah, lovely! so then you and i have quite a bit in common. nice to meet you
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lovely to meet you too x
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There is so much beauty here! I especially love the idea “I have been crowned with questions,” and the sounds in “God’s music is a floating note.” Gorgeous!
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thank you, Jennifer, I always appreciate your comments xx
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Amazing eloquence and subjective view! You’re quite the instrument ! Blessings
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thankyou, and if being an instrument means I get played by this wordy universe, I’m all for it 😉
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I always have a sense of a powerful voice when I read your poems! Powerful and yet refreshing, yes, a rich and beautiful noise!
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thank you it is the richness of this world, like caramel letters on my tongue… that brings pulse to my veins
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What lovely worlds you create — in fewer words than a good commercial jingle, you give me such a shiver — a good one!
I hope you don’t think I’m being a bitch. Plural of knee is knees. Knee’s is “My knee’s bumps are driving me crazy.) Please forgive me for intruding. 😎
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haha you’re forgiven! dad does that to me all the time.
I was NEVER good at those details .. I’ll change it immediately please FORGIVE ME!! 🙂
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Don’t ask forgiveness, please. None needed. After all, you have read my poems. I should be apologizing to you!
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haha you’re funny
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😎
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A fluted purple explosion!!
This entire poem is epic, but that line is pure genius. I wonder if that’s what the Big Bang looked like. All fluted and purple.
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it did
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I have to tip my cap to you for responding to the Duino Elegies. They are some of the most striking and ethereal poetry I have ever read.
And I think that you are really onto their spirit with this fabulous verse:
“cracking my chest
a kaleidoscopic orchestra of YES”
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Thankyou!! Number two coming soon, it is quite a challenge really because when I read his stuff I am taken to a place of almost no words!
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That is how I would describe my experience of his poetry too. I find that I can puzzle over each of his words almost endlessly. When I read Rilke I am almost overwhelmed by the gulf that separates his talent and sensitivity from my own. But that is a good thing. . . So, again, I am impressed by your effort and I am really looking forward to seeing all 12 of your “response” poems. 🙂
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I think it’s his sensitivity or connection to the inexplicable that gives rise to the ‘talent’ because maybe you don’t need personal talent when you are in such a place of desire to touch or to know the seemingly unknowable… maybe
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Maybe his true gift is in his sensitivity and connection . . . and that he could actually describe what he saw and felt.
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yes definitely
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